she leaned slightly forward with a conscientious expression,
then she laughed, an absurd, charming little laugh,
and I laughed too and came forward into the room.
“I’m p-paralyzed with happiness.” She laughed again,
as if she said something very witty, and held my hand for a moment,
looking up into my face, promising that there was no one in the world she so much wanted to see.
That was a way she had. ( Fitgerald Page 13)
I had a good time reading this "poem" that your wrote. You should have spaced it out more and so it could look longer and so it could make more sense!
ReplyDeleteit dosent even sound like a poem to me space it out and maybe it might sound like one
ReplyDeleteOk thanks for yalls back up guys i really appreciate it! ill take yalls advice!
ReplyDeleteI like the concept of the words but like the others have said it would look more like a poem if it was spaced out more in other places. And why is she giggly?
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